In the Moment

Posted on | July 16, 2010 | 13 Comments |

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In the Moment

Past was the time for savouring.

Still to come was the time for repleteness.

Now he was going to devour her.

She was a feast for the senses:

a rich fecund aroma of arousal;

her warm palette of flushed skin;

the muffled cries around her gag;

a muscle jerking as his tongue laps;

chocolate sweet and tart in his mouth.

She is his dessert.

He is her voracious glutton.

69 words

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13 Responses to “In the Moment”

  1. Hylas
    July 16th, 2010 @ 3:28 pm

    Mmm… chocolate. Mmm… gags. Also, 69, heh :)

  2. Katia
    July 16th, 2010 @ 11:52 pm

    Aroma for arousal…nice!

  3. The Panserbjørne
    July 17th, 2010 @ 1:22 am

    Great word selections with “repleteness” and “fecund”. I’m always delighted when people pick unusual or obscure choices. Vocabulary stretching is fun!

    I had expected a lot more people to use “palette”. Used it myself, in fact, but had to trim it again to match the word length.

    Anyhow, thanks as ever for joining us this week! Happy FFF.

    – PB

  4. Luna
    July 17th, 2010 @ 2:32 am

    I do love voracious gluttons. ;) Nice piece.

  5. Chocolate Puss
    July 17th, 2010 @ 5:23 am

    Dessert and voracious glutton go together well. ;-)

    ~CP

  6. Transylvanian Miss
    July 17th, 2010 @ 8:53 am

    Beautifully evocative
    always,
    Bilinda

  7. Lexi
    July 17th, 2010 @ 10:30 am

    Yours are always so flowing and poetic. The word count really doesn’t seem to apply to you somehow. Maybe it’s the juicy words.

  8. yummy
    July 17th, 2010 @ 11:31 pm

    wow, so powerful in so few words

  9. Spring Flower
    July 18th, 2010 @ 8:10 am

    Gluttony is a beautiful sin. ;-)
    Happy belated FFF!

  10. ~m
    July 18th, 2010 @ 2:59 pm

    Oooh Dee – lovely work.

  11. Dee
    July 21st, 2010 @ 2:10 pm

    Hylas – That was the required word count for the week. Made me snicker, too.

    Katia – Smell is so important, I think.

    PB – Those are obscure? It’s just part of how I talk!

    Luna – *hugs you voraciously*

    Chocolate Puss – Your username is perfect for this piece.

    Bilinda – Thank you, hon!

    Lexi – Juicy words is a great description. I like it :) And I work hard to stick to the word count, but it just makes the writing stronger, I think.

    yummy – I aim to please!

    Spring Flower – Well, it is until you need a vomitarium. Then, less so…

    ~m – Thanks, hon!

    xx to all,

    Dee

  12. nilla
    August 3rd, 2010 @ 12:34 am

    I’m sooooo behind…gawd this was delightful…i loved your wordplay, the picture you created that..deepened the still photo…a muscle jumping as he licks…oh, Dee that was great!!

    Very belated happy FFF!

    nilla

  13. Dee
    August 3rd, 2010 @ 9:04 pm

    *chuckle* Glad you enjoyed, nilla!

    xx Dee


  

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